Wednesday, 9 May 2012

Final Draft of Screenplay

In total, I wrote three different drafts of the screenplay, acting on feedback from other members of the group, but the final copy reads as follows:

SIMON SAYS

          EXT. THE PARK - DAY

          SIMON is sat under a tree in the park. He is holding a small
          notebook and pen. It is apparent that he is attempting to
          write something he finds difficult.

          Simon chews on the pen and frowns at the open page in his
          notebook. He is not impressed with what he has written.

                              SIMON
                         (With gusto)
                    Hattie, you are the hat I never
                    want to take off.

          He stares at the page for a moment, before furiously
          scribbling through what he has read.

                              SIMON
                         (Muttering)
                    No, that's shit.

          Simon flips through a couple of pages in his notebook. It is
          clear he has been working on this for some time.

                              SIMON
                         (Reading)
                    Your eyes sparkle like the milky
                    way, I could stare into them all
                    night and day.

          Simon pauses for a moment to consider this line.

                              SIMON
                         (Shaking head)
                    Definitely not.

          He flips through a few more pages, stopping to read extracts
          from his scribbled notes.

                              SIMON
                    With hair like a scented garden
                    of.. wild plants? ..You're perfect
                    because.. you always.. let me
                    finish the popcorn?

          Simon shakes his head in frustration and flicks to a clean
          page in his notebook.

                              SIMON
                         (Writing while speaking)
                    Hattie, you keep my soul as warm as
                    my head... If you weren't around
                    I'd wish I was dead...

          He finishes writing this down, then looks contemplatively
          across the park, chewing his pen.

                              SIMON
                    You like watching scary movies late
                    at night in the dark... Sometimes
                    when I look at you I think you'd
                    make a very pretty shark.

          Simon reflects on this for a moment. He stares at the page
          in his notebook. He then calmly closes the notebook, tucks
          the pen into the spine, and holds it for a moment.

                              SIMON
                    Oh, screw this.

          He throws the notebook violently across the park and drops
          back into the grass in frustration. He slips his headphones
          into his ears - music starts to play and he closes his eyes,
          losing himself in his imagination.

                                                          FADE TO

          EXT. THE PARK - DAY (DREAM SEQUENCE)

          We open on a soft-focus, fuzzy, bright close-up of Hattie
          smiling (this is Simon's POV). We swap to Hattie's POV,
          revealing Simon smiling shyly back at her.

          Suddenly Hattie turns and runs out of frame. Simon quickly
          starts after her.

                              SIMON
                         (Internal and muffled)
                    Hattie! Wait..!

          Simon follows her across the park. She keeps slipping away
          from him, but continuously stops to let him catch up. She
          skips behind a bush, and crouches down in the dirt.

          Simon follows her behind the bush, and crouches down next to
          her. He peers at her quizzically.

                              SIMON
                    What are we..?

                              HATTIE
                    Shhh!

          Hattie slowly raises a finger to Simon's lips. She pauses,
          giggles, and removing her hand, slowly leans forward as if
          to kiss him.

                                                          FADE TO

          EXT. THE PARK - DAY

          We fade from the dream sequence onto a close-up shot of
          Simon, who is still dreaming about kissing Hattie. His lips
          move as if kissing her, until he opens his eyes and realises
          what he is doing. He slowly takes out his headphones, stares
          up at the sky thoughtfully, and then suddenly jumps up out
          of shot.

          EXT. THE PARK - DAY

          Simon is holding a large, expensive-looking bunch of TULIPS.
          He admires them for a moment, nods, and dials HATTIE on his
          mobile phone.

                              HATTIE
                         (On phone)
                    Yeah hello?

                              SIMON
                         (Still smiling at his tulips)
                    Hi Hattie. Are we still on for
                    later?

          Hattie's nose is red and she is sniffling.

                              HATTIE
                    Oh, hey Simon! Yeah, of course.
                    Four thirty, right? (She blows her
                    nose)

                              SIMON
                         (Looking pleased with himself)
                    That's right, yeah.. Hey, you don't
                    sound too great. Are you okay?

                              HATTIE
                    Oh, I've just got hayfever. It's
                    the time of year.. The tulips have
                    just bloomed, so I'm a snivelling
                    wreck. (Laughs)

          Simon looks in horror at the tulips in his hand.

                              SIMON
                    That sounds like shit. Are you sure
                    you don't want to stay home?

                              HATTIE
                         (Brightly)
                    No, no, I'll be fine. I've got a
                    jumbo box of tissues. (She giggles)
                    I'll see you later Simon.

          Hattie hangs up, leaving Simon staring at the tulips. After
          a moment he walks to the nearest bin, dumps the tulips, and
          leaves. As he walks away we see a price tag on the bunch of
          flowers - it reads £14.99.

          EXT. THE LAKE - DAY

          Simon is walking through the park trying to come up with a
          way to tell Hattie how he feels about her.

          He stops and addresses an imaginary Hattie.

                              SIMON
                         (Gallantly)
                    Hattie, how would you like to be my
                    girlfriend?

          He pauses to consider this, but shakes his head and
          continues walking.

                              SIMON
                    Too formal.

          Simon stops to address another imaginary Hattie.

                              SIMON
                         (Cheesily)
                    Hey Hattie, wanna come back to mine
                    and see what happens?

          He shakes his head in mild horror and continues walking.

                              SIMON
                    Urgh, definitely not. Too creepy.

          He kicks a stick into the lake, and stands there watching it
          float away.

                              SIMON
                         (Quietly)
                    Hey, Hattie. Would you like to go
                    for a drink sometime, with me?

          He nods to himself, satisfied, and walks away to meet
          Hattie.

          EXT. THE PARK - LATE AFTERNOON

          Simon runs to catch up with the red-nosed Hattie. He is
          panting slightly when he reaches her.

                              SIMON
                         (Red-faced but grinning)
                    Hattie! Hi. Hey.

          He punches her awkwardly on the shoulder, but regrets it
          immediately. She looks at him, bemused, rubbing her nose
          with a tissue.

                              SIMON
                    So.. how are you?

                              HATTIE
                    Not bad, besides the hayfever.

          She gives him a quick smile and then scans slowly across the
          park. There is an awkward silence.

                              HATTIE
                    Uh.. So.. How's your goldfish?

                              SIMON
                         (Quickly)
                    Kevin.

                              HATTIE
                    Yeah, Kevin. How's Kevin?

          Hattie's PHONE buzzes in her hand. We hear a text message
          tone.

                              SIMON
                    Kevin's fine, yeah.

          Hattie nods distractedly as she reads her message.

                              HATTIE
                    Ok, great. Listen, Simon, I'm gonna
                    have to go, I'm sorry. Laura just
                    got off work early.

                              SIMON
                         (Confused)
                    Laura?

                              HATTIE
                    Yeah, you know Laura, right? It's
                    silly really, but it's a year today
                    since we went on our first date.
                    (She giggles) I can hardly believe
                    she's been my girlfriend for that
                    long!

          Hattie smiles up at Simon brightly and then peers past him,
          looking for Laura.

                              SIMON
                    ..Y-... Your girlfriend?

                              HATTIE
                         (Still on the lookout for
                         Laura)
                    She said she'd be along any minute.
                    Although, that doesn't mean much
                    from her, I mean one time I was sat
                    waiting for her for an hour and all
                    she had to say for herself was that
                    her cat had got stuck in the
                    bathroom, I was like, what kind of
                    excuse is that...

          Hattie's voice fades out, and we see Simon's face drop as he
          realises the girl of his dreams is out of his reach. Tears
          well at his eyes, but Hattie doesn't notice.

                              HATTIE
                         (Sees Laura in the distance)
                    There she is! Well I've gotta go,
                    Simon, I'll see you some other time
                    okay.

          Hattie walks away before she has even finished her sentence,
          leaving Simon standing alone with tears in his eyes. He rubs
          his eye with a sleeve, and as he does so, a pretty girl
          walks past him down the path.

          Simon's attention is captured by the girl. In beautiful
          slow-motion, we see her flick her hair over her shoulder,
          smile back at Simon, and continue walking.

          Simon grins, and follows her down the path.


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